space

by Kirsten

comments by:

Mike


i'll me
      you'll you

and we'll copy the definitions from the dictionary

        in it, over it
i might just be on love with you now



        spatial relations


according to our stars
        different ways of clusters                                             


but how much does language
                really change thought?

                                can you give me four words for this
                                                            feeling
                 a four letter word that means spatial relationship
                                                       making space

i can never reason with myself anyhow                                          



Accourding to Mike Magee:

Date: Mon, 15 Feb 1999 15:04:40 -0500
From: mmagee@dept.english.upenn.edu (Michael Magee)       


Kirsten, a couple quick thoughts about this poem "Space" which I like an
awful lot - the way "me" and "you" work as verbs is great - "performing
the self" in this weirdly literal way.  "on love" instead of "in love" I
like too.  "How much does langauge / really change thought" - are you
giving away the game too much there?  Maybe, I think.  And one little
technical thing which occurred: breaking the final 2 lines:

"I can never reason
        with myself anyhow"

So that maybe you get an extra hard accent on "self" out of that which is
interesting, as well as a new way to look at the word "reason."  Good,
good, good, more maybe later.     -m.