Although the journal’s
tagline is “Poetry for the New Millennium,” VGE
2 includes eight contributors whose work appeared in the Allen anthology 43
years ago: Ashbery, Blaser, Ferlinghetti, Ginsberg, McClure, Orlovsky, Snyder & Whalen. Second generation New Americans turn up
(Berkson, Malanga, DiPrima, Notley) as do a few
langpos (Bernstein, Hejinian, Perelman, moi) as well as others who fall
generally into this same post-avant territory, such as
One poem in particular first
caught my eye because I recognized the handwriting, literally, as it’s
presented on the right-hand page in holographic reproduction, the identical
text printed on the left. The poem is by Allen
Ginsberg, but it doesn’t look anything like your typical Ginsberg work &
indeed acknowledges its source by its title, “Lines for Creeley’s Ear”:
The whole
weight of
everything
too much
my heart
in
the subway
pounding
subtly
headache
from
smoking
dizzy
a moment
riding
uptown to see
Karmapa
Buddha
tonite.
One can hear what Ginsberg
is finding in Creeley’s line – that almost gamelan
precision as the mind steps through the syllables, something Creeley gets not
from the Projectivists but from Zukofsky. The parameters of the project are
simple enough: quatrains with no more than four syllables – the first three
stanzas each have ten syllables, the last one 13. If you track the quatrains
even closer by syllable count*, you see that Ginsberg has done an admirable job
in creating not only a sense of variety but of aural development, starting with
two of the shortest lines, ending with three of the longest.
Ginsberg plays with some of
Creeley’s famed enjambments in the first two stanzas, but it’s interesting that
the third – when the impact of smoking is being described – seems almost the
most flat-footed. It’s an inspired, counterintuitive way to mimic tobacco’s
impact on blood pressure.
The one line for me that
doesn’t work is the second one of the last stanza. No other line in the entire
poem contains what is so clearly two distinct aural units & I suspect that Creeley,
faced with the same set of choices, might well instead have run them as two
lines & to have ended with Buddha
tonite as its own separate one-line stanza. It’s conceivable that Ginsberg
heard it as taking a longer breath before the final sweep of the last two
lines, but to end of the first word on n & start the
next with t breaks that movement for
my ear.
Ginsberg seems to have been
similarly bothered by that final stanza. The poem appears in what I take to be
a revised form in Ginsberg’s Collected
Poems. In the Collected, it is titled simply “For
Creeley’s Ear.” Buddha has been moved up to the third line alongside Karmapa, with tonight – now spelled the traditional manner – alone on the fourth
line. The problem of the second line now tends to dissolve – it becomes a step
toward the only five syllable line in the work, with the two-syllable last line
functioning almost as a coda or bell to signal the poem’s end.
That’s an interesting
revision, in that it does solve the problem that nagged at me from my first
reading, yet overall I think the Collected
Poems version is weaker for it. The revised version puts the climax of the
poem on the penultimate line, almost to the point where the final line seems
added on in order to avoid violating the form. In the
My sense is that neither
version quite works as well as it might, that the stumbling block of the second
line of the final stanza can’t really be addressed anywhere but in the second
line itself. It’s intriguing to watch Ginsberg make the attempt, but it’s a
mistake to have tried to resolve the issue elsewhere in the stanza.
That Ginsberg in 1976 is
still writing what is clearly a “Creeley study” is, I think, a sign of how
little affected by his celebrity Ginsberg at least sought to be. These lines
may be for Creeley’s ear, but the
work itself is clearly for Ginsberg’s benefit. That we benefit also is just
part of its charm.
* Thus the syllable count of the
lines for each quatrain:
2 – 2 – 4 – 2
3 – 3 – 2 – 2
2 – 3 – 2 – 3
2 – 4 – 3 – 4
** This
would have been Rangjung Rigpe Dorje, the 16th Gyalwang
Karmapa, who traveled to the